"Cinderella, oh what a beautiful girl." sighed the door man. I wish with all my heart that her big blue eyes would set on mine like clay; when we pass every day in the palace entrance he thought to him self. Coming from the big wooden doors stood a beautiful princess, waves of perfume surrounded him as she flung her pink blouses at him and murderously growled through her gleaming white teeth, "Starched NO creases!". Still Happily smiling his face was covered in dirty washing he sighed disappointedly again .
Rose
Hi my name is Dylan I think you should start out with a more exciting start to the story. It was definitely a twist. But other than that it was great.
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Rose
13/3/2014 12:43:26 pm
Corrected 100 WC by Rose
"Cinderella, oh what a beautiful girl." sighed the door man. I wish with all my heart that her big blue eyes would set on mine like clay; when we pass every day in the palace entrance he thought to him self. Coming from the big wooden doors stood a beautiful princess, waves of perfume surrounded him as she flung her pink blouses at him and murderously growled through her gleaming white teeth, "Starched NO creases!". Still Happily smiling his face was covered in dirty washing he sighed disappointedly again .
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