One day Hansel and Gretel were playing tag in the woods. Soon after that Gretel was chasing Hansel and they saw 4 men circling them. So Hansel and Gretel phoned the police. When the police got there, there were bodies all over the men were kicking, punching and slapping each other. Then one of the men rampaged through all of the police and came over to Hansel and Gretel. “WA what do you want” Hansel said anxiously. “I want to kill you” said the man “no you will not” said Gretel. “Oh but I will…
Adam
Hi my name is Dylan what happened to the police? I really like how you ended the story. I do not think that you need to change anything.
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Olivia 6cs
16/3/2014 03:47:04 am
Adam, this is really good! Brings up the suspense. It's catching the reader so it's making me want to read more. Don't change anything.
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