Long ago a prince travelled many miles to meet a princess tall and fair. However he couldn't find ‘the one’ as most of them were spoilt and vain. So the very next day the prince decided to visit a psychic and ask her about what his future lay ahead. Although the lady didn't know of anyone, she could see a lady in his near future with long hair. Soon the prince came across a lady in a tower he said “Rapunzel, Rapunzel let down your hair”. Unfortunately she had just had a skinhead, so she threw her hair out of the window because she wasn't interested.
Hi Abbie, well done for entering the 100WC this week, there were almost 1800 entries!
I really enjoyed reading your story, so much so that I'm recommending it for the showcase!
Your ending made me laugh too!
Well done and keep writing. :)
Mrs Tucker (100WC Team) Wirral, UK.
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Mr Temple
9/3/2014 02:18:02 pm
That's fantastic news - thanks, Mrs Tucker!
I too loved the twist of Rapunzel being a skinhead! It is fantastically well punctuated too - especially the although sentence.
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Mrs Henderson
9/3/2014 03:09:10 pm
Your ending was extremely amusing Abbie, not what I expected at all. Well done!
Dear Abbie great job but what is a skinhead?
All your grammer looks good to me.
From Frank
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Abbie
11/3/2014 01:35:08 pm
Thank you Frank for your comment. Skin heads are when someone has shaved all of their hair off.
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