Lara I liked reading your very imaginative story. I too would wonder about such a sight, but I guess you never know! What a fun story - love that the turtle did the limbo to a song called turtle duck - very clever! Nice work of writing and using the words in the prompt.
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logan
5/10/2013 09:14:32 am
I loved your 100 word challenge Lara it really made me laugh! I liked the bit where you said 'we danced to a song called the turtle duck' and the story is about a turtle. is the turtle best friends with the duck? I also liked your use of brackets in the first sentence. I was confused why you needed a capital letter (in the penultimate sentence) for stood.
Apart from that it was a super 100 word challenge!
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Mr Temple
7/10/2013 03:19:03 pm
Like the others, I smiled at this. Well done for writing such a good idea in 100 words.
In a couple of places, your full stops and capitals are unclear. Could it be the iPad playing tricks? Even so, edit your work back for this.
Also, you write 'I seen'. What should it be?
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