This Week's 100 Word Challenge - Persuading! - 6T @ Tanfield Lea Community Primary School

This Week's 100 Word Challenge - Persuading!

2/5/2012

Imagine that you want to stay up late to watch a programme on television. You have chosen to write a letter to your parent / carer so you can give the best reasons and support it with statistics (you can make them up!)

Write 2/3 reasons why you should be allowed this.

Don't forget a greeting (Dear .....) and signing off (Love from).

Remember: Although it is informal, still use openers (WAI) etc.

Be persuasive (using emotive language, questions and facts / figures)

26 Comments

Tyler link

2/5/2012 08:20:06 am

Dear Mam,
Can I please stop up to watch the programe on the T.V! Let's see, if my bed time is 9:00pm and the programe starts at 9:30pm and finishes at 10:30pm that is 1 and a half hours extra. Furthermore, I will stop in bed in the morning an extra 1 and a half hours then, I will gain the sleep back. 99.4% of sleep experts say that if you le your child stop up later and let him/her have the wasted time be in bed in the morning then your child will actually gain 25 minutes of extra time. Besides you also like to watch the same programe !!

Hope this helped you make your decision!!
Tyler

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 10:52:26 am

Those sleep experts know what they are talking about - is he called Kevin Connolly by any chance? Good arguments.

Don't forget: 1 exclamation mark will do!

Shannon-Jo link

3/5/2012 10:39:04 am

Dear Mam,
I’m writing this letter to ask if I could stay up tonight for an extra half an hour to watch Coronation Street. I am going to give a few reasons on why I should be allowed to watch this program.

Firstly, I think I should watch Coronation Street because it shows me what feelings children have when their parents have split up. Another reason is, I should watch this program because it has no bad violence, just a bunch of drama that happens on the street. Finally, the last reason is, I don’t see why I shouldn’t watch this particular program because there is some funny bits in it and children from my age downwards.

I hope this helps you make your decision.
Love from Shannon-Jo xxx

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 10:53:07 am

Terrific organised arguments. Great openers to structure your ideas. Did it work?

Charlotte link

4/5/2012 10:06:57 am

Dear mam,
I am writting this letter to ask if I could stay up tonight for an extra 15 minutes to watch coronation street. Here is some reasons why I should be allowed to watch this program.

My first reason is because it has no bad language or violence in it. My second reason is because I get to know how other children feel when their parents split up.My third reason is because it is humorous and it is only 15 minutes after I go to bed. I don't see why I shouldn't watch this programme.

After hearing these reasons I hope it will help you make your decision.
Love from Charlotte xxxx

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 10:54:33 am

A small request - 15 minutes. Well done for using posh language like humourous.

Don't forget: Names of programmes (eg. Coronation Street) need capitals. Great letter!

Bethany

4/5/2012 11:36:01 am

Dear Mam,
Can I stay up just for another 30 mintues so I can watch Emmerdale, I will give some reason why I should be aloud to stay up.
One reason is that I think I should stay up because it shows me what feelings it gives me when peoples mam and dad split up.Another reason is that I should watch this programme because I has no vilnce in it ans there is only like fighting in it.Finaly the last reason is that I dont know why I would not be aloud to watch this particular programme because there is some funny childerrned in it, and it is only half an hour after my bed time.

I hope this helps you make your decision
on if you will let me or not.
Love from Bethany xxxxx

bethany

4/5/2012 11:37:11 am

sorry i forgot to do paragraphs

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 10:55:41 am

A persuasive letter - well done! You have given 3 good reasons to watch Emmerdale. Good editing too!

Bethany

4/5/2012 11:36:45 am

Dear Mam,
Can I stay up just for another 30 mintues so I can watch Emmerdale, I will give some reason why I should be aloud to stay up.

One reason is that I think I should stay up because it shows me what feelings it gives me when peoples mam and dad split up.Another reason is that I should watch this programme because I has no vilnce in it ans there is only like fighting in it.Finaly the last reason is that I dont know why I would not be aloud to watch this particular programme because there is some funny childerrned in it, and it is only half an hour after my bed time.

I hope this helps you make your decision
on if you will let me or not.
Love from Bethany xxxxx

Rhiannon Telford

6/5/2012 03:49:33 am

Dear mum and dad,
Can i just stay up for another 55 minutes to watch coronation street.I know i am the oldest child in the house out of me and Brooke i would just really like to stay up for a little bit longer please Brooke wont mind.75% out 100% of children watch coronation street so if i am a good girl can i stay up for 55 minutes please.If i am a bad girl will i get wrong and i won't get to watch coronation street.Its a great thing to trust me so let me stay up and watch it.
Love from,
Rhiannon Telford

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 10:56:47 am

Well done for using statistics to back up your argument. Saying 'Trust me' also is persuasive.

Don't use i - use a capital I!

Luke

7/5/2012 01:23:16 am

Dear Mam,

Please can I stay up an extra 30 minutes to watch Eastenders. Here are some reasons why I should be allowed

My first reason is that we both enjoy watching this programme. When I will go to bed, I will go to sleep straight away. Furthermore, it will help me to get through emotional breakdowns. My final reason is that it is suitable for kids because the programme has kids included on it.

I hope you agree that you will let me stay up to watch Eastenders
Love from Luke

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 10:58:26 am

An organised letter and some good openers. You have appealed to your mum effectively.

With a few extra words, you could have used a Kevin Connolly type character to support your argument with statistics.

Lewis M

7/5/2012 08:22:24 am

Dear mum,
i have been wanting to stay up for a while to watch the end of my movie here is my reasons why i want you to let me.
firstly i wouldnt have to wait for the afternoon of the next day to watch the end of it because i would need to see the end to understand the movie. If i didnt understand it. Also i would be able to see you for a little bit more because through the day we both have to work or go to school, that means we dont see each other. My final reason is that i could let you have more time down stairs so you dont have to read me a bed time story.
Hope you understand.
love fom lewis

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 11:00:09 am

An excellent argument. You have openers well (although some commas with them would show your 'breathing) and persuasive language.

Don't forget those capitals (example: i and to start sentences)

india!!x

7/5/2012 11:11:27 am

Dear Mam,
I’m writing this letter to ask if I could stay up and watch some television like emerdale.here are some reasons on why I should be allowed to watch television!

First, I think I should watch emerdale later because it can keep you occupied when you have nothing to do. Another reason is, I should because it has nothing bad in it. Finally, the last reason is, I don’t see why I shouldn’t watch this particular program because there is some funny bits in it and children from my age downwards.

I hope i can stay up and watch this love from indiaxxxx

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 11:02:15 am

3 good reasons to persuade your mum, supported by good explanation of your reasons using because.

Could you add a rhetorical question to further convince her?

Jasmine

7/5/2012 11:39:33 am

Dear mam,

I want to ask you if I could stay up an extra hour tonight to watch a programme called Frozen Planet,

My first reason is that it is a very educational programme which learns you all about the planet and how animals evolved and survive in the wild.

My second reason is, it shows me how important animals really are to the earth.

I hope you let me watch this programme and I promise I will help you do the housework tomorrow night and you are always telling me to look after MOTHER EARTH.

Love always jasmine x

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 11:03:53 am

Lots of technical vocabulary and emotive language (and you are always telling me to look after MOTHER EARTH!). Very good!

Perhaps you could add more detail in your second reason. Eg. If I don't get to watch this programme, I wouldn't be able to learn ......

abbi

7/5/2012 12:55:48 pm

Dear mam and dad,

i would like to stay up a extra hour to watch a movie

my first reson is that after working extremly hard at school i like to relax 79% of children like to have a luxry rest after a hard day at school.In addition i should be allowed to stay up for longer because it keeps me occupied.

after reading this i hope it has condiderd your choice on letting me stay up for a extra hour!

love from abbi xx

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 11:04:54 am

Some terrific openers and use of statistics to support your idea.

Your writing would benefit from proof reading for capitals and full stops

jay p :)

7/5/2012 03:18:00 pm

Dear Mam
I am just asking for one thing can I watch this amazing movie! I will do all the house work all week you do not know how much I want to watch this movie.The action is unbelievable it is so good I can not describe it! I will wash the dishes after every meal.And I will even keep my bedroom tidy! I will always do what you say and do every thing for you. I know this movie ends late however I will go to bed early every day in the next week.Hope you understand now.

love from jay :)

Mr Temple

9/5/2012 11:06:10 am

With such promises, how could anyone refuse? Even a tidy bedroom?

Good use of however in your arguments and well edited. Great job!

Arundeep mehat

1/6/2012 07:50:53 am

hello i am in y3 and in my class i heard sum bands and i have sum fun

hannah

1/6/2012 08:13:07 am

if i was a queen i would make sure that everyone gets what they want

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