Once,there was a little girl called charlie.One stormy day at the park she started to walk home whn a bunch of teenage girls started to annoy her and trip her over.When she got home she ran all the way up the stairs to her bedroom she looked at her knees and her hand they were coverd in blood she didnt want show her mam or dad.The next day her mam got her dressed whe she saw the marks she was devestated she said "who did this" charlie replied "these teenagers" when her mam found the teenagers in park she told them off and then the teens said sorry and promised not to do it again
9 Comments
Grace Bralic
22/11/2012 04:59:08 pm
what a upsetting story.
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Lucia
22/11/2012 11:37:31 pm
Sad story lea, but be cearful! The spelling is very important!
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Olivia
27/11/2012 01:50:30 pm
Thanks but you have spelt careful wrong
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23/11/2012 02:27:05 pm
Charlie did the sensible thing in telling her mother. It's always best to let an adult know if you're being bullied as you so rightly point out. As the others have said, you need to read through to check typing mistakes and punctuation.
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Mr Temple
25/11/2012 12:40:25 am
A scary story - I hope it was from your imagination, not real life. You have used sentence openers well to link the sentences.
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Martine
29/11/2012 07:06:45 am
good story. Do you like writing stories?
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Olivia
2/12/2012 11:28:26 am
no not really :)
Martine
31/1/2013 01:01:53 pm
Its not good, it is fantastic.
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