Today is my birthday. My mother sent me a letter, telling me to visit her for a cup of tea and a conversation. As soon as I had received the letter I put my coat on and headed for the alleyway. Soon I was walking down a dark, shadowy pavement and in the street of houses was a strange looking home, it had wet glass and hot pains. Strangely, orange liquid poured from the window, and it's spelt out the words your turtle is dead, I didn't have a clue what the words meant so I turned around with my fingers covering my ears, I spoke out it's just a silly joke, it's just a silly joke, it's just a silly joke I said, but right I front of my eyes was the head of my turtle. It looked like it had aged goodbye to me I felt so melancholic I was now crying my turtle is DEAD. His eyes were shaped so round and closed his head was covered in funny pus he wasn't just dead he was brutally killed.
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Mr Graves(100wc)
6/10/2013 11:06:37 am
Hi Abbie, thank you for sharing this 100wc entry. It's a superbly written challenge. A nice variety of sentence starters which help to give the reader lots of information. Keep up the great blogging.
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Mr Temple
8/10/2013 01:55:46 pm
What a gruesome tale - ideal for Halloween in a couple of weeks! My favourite sentence was 'Strangely, orange liquid poured from the window'.
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Abbie
16/10/2013 04:20:48 am
"I was now crying" my turtle was DEAD!
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Cailen[Year 6]
9/10/2013 12:30:58 pm
Wow what a fantastic story. They are some brilliant words such as melancholic,brutally and much more. However you should of used some punctuation like ? ! " " Apart from that it was brilliant keep up the good work.
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Abbie
16/10/2013 04:18:39 am
I was now crying my turtle was dead!
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