Me (Jack) and my step brother Jonathan were playing outside it was a wild windy wednesday. Our mum came out and told us that there was a tornado heading towards us but it would be approxamitely three hours fourty-four minutes and three seconds till it came. So we kept on playing our game nicely then Jake started cheating so i told our mum. As the temerature dropped we got cold and went inside. Mum give us our dinner. Beans,fries,pizza and chicken nuggets yum. Three hours thirty-one minutes and fifty-four seconds later we heard the hurricane/tornado alarm. It frightened the life out of me,Jake and my mum we ran as fast as we could to safe shelter there was nothing to go to. In the corner of my eye i seen a steel shelter with food inside. When we got to the shelter of steel we opened it with a crrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeak. Ten minutes later we all said as the temperature dropped to -7 degrees "Its getting c-o-l-d" As time went by the hurricane/tornado dissapered. We seen someone so we banged loudly. The person came towards us and let us out. It became night time and as the tempreture dropped i fell asleep and the same with Jake.
11 Comments
Mr Temple
11/10/2012 03:46:15 pm
Congratulations Kieran, you are the first ever Tanfield pupil to have a blog post on the 100wc.net website. You are No. 38 on the list.
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Bradley
12/10/2012 06:40:29 am
Great story good use of connectives and openers Well done Kieran!
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harrison
12/10/2012 09:55:26 am
Hello Jack
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Niall
12/10/2012 10:05:26 am
Great story your getting viewers from all over the world
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luca
14/10/2012 09:56:58 pm
cool story it had a nice twist with the tornado coming in but I thought you could have had some more description. great job
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Kieran
16/10/2012 05:07:33 am
Thank you for your comments i will try and go on your school website.
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Bethany W
16/10/2012 05:13:24 am
I really like your story it's really good and intresting.
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Mrs Fairburn
17/10/2012 11:46:19 am
Well done Kieran, you have built up description and moved the story on well. I particularly like 'It frightened the life out of me'.
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Alastair
17/10/2012 04:38:14 pm
Very good kieran I hope you keep going because this is very good
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sophie p
18/10/2012 05:04:15 am
I love your story its great and really really interesting I wish i rote that story
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chantelle
14/11/2012 11:18:11 am
"I feel really up set when I am getting bullying because I feel like I am not wanted around."The porson who is bullying the seconed porson overe and overe agen might feel horrible and like they want to be your friend.( Cyber means where you are hacking your phone or computer yet overe 50 people's phone has been hacked and overe 20 people's computer has been hacked.Hacking has been going on all over the county and for 3 years.)You can stop bullying by bringing a consequent like exspeled from school but sometimes it isent in side of school it is at home.
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