Great text Katie!!!! I listened to it all and it was really good!!!! I liked how you put the word: hurled (we hurled our suitcases into the car!) xx xx
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Mark Temple
16/9/2012 02:04:52 pm
What a lovely positive comment Shannon-Jo! It's a great story with lots of powerful verbs. Katie will be pleased you commented.
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Jodie
17/9/2012 04:58:38 am
Wow! It sounds great like all your other peices of writing! You have lots of good words that I would probably not of used in my writing and may use them next time in my writing!
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katie h
17/9/2012 04:59:28 am
Thanks Shannon I really try to put good Wow words in to improve my sentances and I really appreciate your comment xx
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