Hi Georgia.
You tried really hard this week to include all the words. It is quite tricky to do this and you did well. Just check that you have all your writing either in the past tense or the present as sometimes it mixes between the two. Well done - your story has made me want to visit the beach.
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Mr Temple
6/10/2013 07:46:14 am
Good effort today Georgia. You have used more full stops and some descriptive language. Well done for using Suddenly as well.
In places you could put " " around the words spoken. Can you see where?
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Lara
16/10/2013 04:26:03 am
Great work Georgia I liked your 100 wc .
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