In Art, we will be looking at portraits and on Friday we will write a 100 word challenge linked to the comic strip.
Below is a taster scene from the comic, but you will need to click here for the whole version!
This week's 100 word challenge is a little different: a comic strip!
In Art, we will be looking at portraits and on Friday we will write a 100 word challenge linked to the comic strip. Below is a taster scene from the comic, but you will need to click here for the whole version!
76 Comments
Alyssa
29/11/2013 03:24:38 am
“We need to turn back! There’s no time for questions. Just MOVE!” John looked as confused as a pork sausage on a hot summer day; however he proceeded to do as he was told. Suddenly, the black figure had disappeared from the pain glass window and had appeared at the front door. Jim’s eyes widened as big as a full moon! He had seen this creature before but he had no idea where. “Hold on a second, mate! Why are you so urgent to get out of here?” asked John. But Jim wasn’t there. He’d been captured… By him!
Reece(Brandon primary)
2/12/2013 05:46:12 am
I really liked how you created a lot of suspense well done!
Ellie
2/12/2013 05:48:26 am
I really liked when you said john looked as confused as a pork
Suddenly I turned around and……….
Lucy from Amber(Brandon Primary)
2/12/2013 05:51:12 am
Hi Lucy i really liked it were you had to go to through the woods and you have included loads of adjectives. Next time try to use some more
Ryan T (6dc)
2/12/2013 05:51:27 am
Lucy I really like how you used suspense! I really enjoyed reading your 100 WC!
Gina
3/12/2013 01:13:04 am
I thought your writing was great especially when you used suspense in your writing. I am really missing you all,can't wait to see you all again
Holly (Brandon)
3/12/2013 01:13:25 am
I love this 100WC!
Reece Brandon primary
3/12/2013 01:14:34 am
I really liked how you created a lot of suspense and made me read on it is extremely good
Cailen
29/11/2013 03:32:30 am
“I will find you Dr Tango!” As they drove of in the car they came across a funny looking person it looked like he was going to rob a bank. Despite raining, he got out the car and stayed sat under shelter. Out of the corner of his eye, the person seen Andy (the person who got out the car) and he ran of into the far mist. Later that day, Andy went back to the house and found out that the person in the window is someone from the 1900s and commited a crime of killing ten people and was sentenced to jail…
Gina
2/12/2013 05:46:12 am
I really liked where you used brackets in your writing because it gives me a mental picture in my head.Next time you could check your spelling before publishing your work.
Alex & Holly (Brandon primary school)
2/12/2013 05:48:37 am
We liked the way you used great sentence openers! But next time try to use more wow words.
Holly & Alex (Brandon school)
2/12/2013 05:48:49 am
We liked the way you used great sentence openers! But next time try to use more wow words.q
Oliver 6DC
2/12/2013 05:54:15 am
I really liked how you used brackets to add more information . Next time you could describe the characters a bit more.
caitlin
29/11/2013 03:37:32 am
Nightmare of horror
Alfie
2/12/2013 06:03:24 am
I really liked where you said'shivers from our head to toes'. Next time you could use some more adjectives.
Abbie
29/11/2013 03:37:51 am
The air was black and filled with smoke. The winter chills ran down their spines as the chilling figure awaits them in the forest. Grace and Daniel, the troubled teenagers, headed through the trees and into pitch black darkness. Despite having suggested to go around the woods, Daniel was determined to look eye to eye at the beast of Bridgewood Hollow. Although Grace had black shinny hair and red blood shot eyes she was the nicest person in the area. “Be quiet” Daniel repeated frequently “why” Grace said quiet. “Just don’t turn around you will regret it forever I promise”.
Niamh Thexton
2/12/2013 05:47:25 am
Abbie I really liked how you described Grace
Ryan Turnbull
2/12/2013 05:54:56 am
I really liked the first four sentences where it describes the setting and you have got some lovely adjectives.
Molly
3/12/2013 01:15:41 am
I really like how you have described everything with amazing adjectives. Next you need to remember that if your starting some speech, start a new line. Other than that it is outstanding.
Rose
29/11/2013 03:38:16 am
Dramatic investigations
Harvey
2/12/2013 05:53:57 am
I really liked your interesting words and your suspense. The punctuation is amazing!
Curtis
29/11/2013 03:38:25 am
The tale of haunting secrets!
Olivia
29/11/2013 11:08:06 am
That's really good. The adjectives are really brilliant. P.s. Miss you so much as well as Drew, Adam, Callum, Ryan, Lucy, Abbie ,Alyssa. See ya soon xxx
Molly
2/12/2013 05:47:25 am
I really like your ideas and how you have used lots of adjectives. Next time you could use some suspense. I think you need to work on your speech as I think you got a bit muddled up.
Ellie
3/12/2013 01:13:48 am
You used a lot of adjectives which was really good I also like your ending when you said and then he stabbed us and we were dead. X
Kristen
29/11/2013 03:38:41 am
Alicia,6DC
2/12/2013 05:51:43 am
I really like your adverbs and your adjectives.
Emilia
2/12/2013 05:51:53 am
Kristen, I really liked your 100wc it is amazing well done ! a good use of punctuation next time I would use more connectives.
Laras 100 WC
29/11/2013 03:38:56 am
The man I never knew !
Logan(yr6)
30/11/2013 12:13:37 am
lara you have a exelent 100 word challange
Jamie 6dc
2/12/2013 05:49:54 am
I really liked some of the adjectives that you have used , they are really interesting.Next time you could use some more openers.I have really enjoyed your story
Emma
29/11/2013 03:39:09 am
Nightmare
Beth ( Brandon)
3/12/2013 01:17:15 am
Hi Emma I really liked your 100wc, it was amazing how you used description. Next time you could use some more punctuation.
Matthew
29/11/2013 03:39:29 am
Nightmare Dream
Callum
2/12/2013 05:49:22 am
I really liked your description and suspense but next time can you use some more connectives.
Leah B
29/11/2013 03:40:04 am
Precipitously, the wooden door creaked open as scowled through the break I saw a man glaring at me. However, I sensed that this was treacherous place to be, I knew I had seen this place before! My senses told me to run! Then in a split second I rotated round and started sprinting for my life. Suddenly, I tripped and fell down an immense, haunting hole. As my fragile body fell to the ground, I felt light headed and wrecked. I tried to get back up, but as I struggled it seemed to make me in even more in pain…
Cameron
2/12/2013 05:52:01 am
Well done Leah I really liked the part where you said light headed.
Adam
29/11/2013 03:40:26 am
The house from Hell
Reece( Brandon primary school)
2/12/2013 05:49:42 am
I rally liked how you used different characters to create suspense
Reece from Brandon
3/12/2013 01:04:02 am
I liked how you made the refer read more of your fantastic story
Liam.s:)
3/12/2013 01:06:36 am
I love the part wen you put in zombies and vampires
Hannah
3/12/2013 01:15:28 am
Don't forget your capital letter
Jack w
29/11/2013 03:40:40 am
“The reason we need to leave is my worst nightmare is here”. They had to go but where would they go “No! We have to catch this guy” “but how “bang! Bang! Crash! “Run now!” he had big black eyes stone looking teeth and mountain like nose and jet black hear and strait after he started sprinting for us! “Get to the car” he tried to started up the engine and it did not work he was closer he tried again! And he got closer! And Jim tried again and but mick was at the car and then the engine ran
Kaine
29/11/2013 03:40:59 am
It’s too dark outside, and we are getting looked at I can’t see anyone can you but I can hear them. I think we should go do you not, Billy thets go and the others. This is making me shake are you not? Thets run in the woods quickly. It’s best if we run over that bridge because we will get caught by that old man. He is a boxer you no I’m just going to go if you’re not coming we will all come then we are not letting you go by yourself I’m frightened!
Ellie
3/12/2013 01:08:55 am
I like this but I think that you should proof read your work to make sure
Drew
29/11/2013 03:41:22 am
The Blood Curdling House Of Terror
Ryan T 6dc
3/12/2013 01:15:02 am
I realy like the the way you use speech and how did the man find them?
Leah P
29/11/2013 03:41:28 am
My 100wc
Holly (Brandon)
2/12/2013 05:52:43 am
This story is so well written!
Niamh Thexton (6DC)
2/12/2013 05:54:45 am
I really enjoyed your 100wc 29/11/2013 03:41:46 am
Holly T (Brandon school)
3/12/2013 01:05:07 am
Try not to use so much speech next time and next time use speech marks also start a new line every time a different person starts to speak.
micah
29/11/2013 03:42:33 am
On the 7th November well I had a bit of a feeling that I knew that there was something fishy about that man. I told everyone to keep quite because he is always there at 10am he started to walk. 5pm he was putting on a mask and a black uniform he was heading for our back yard my heart started to beat really fast I heard the door open and close I took them to the basement and hid behind the boxes and tried to call 999 but there was no reception .then I saw a hole I said to my youngest son go throw that hall and get help…
Ellie
2/12/2013 05:52:34 am
I really liked when you said I knew there was something fishy about that man and when you tell us the time things happened
Gina
2/12/2013 05:55:39 am
I really liked how you said that' my heart started to beat really fast'. Next time you could use some more adjectives in your work.
Ryan Turnbull (6C)
3/12/2013 01:18:30 am
I really liked the part were you said that the man is a it fishy.
Logan (yr6)
29/11/2013 03:43:00 am
100 word challenge
Gina
3/12/2013 01:06:02 am
I really liked how you used suspense ,well done! Next time you could use some more connectives please.
Alex (Brandon primary school)
3/12/2013 01:17:55 am
Hi I think that your story was great because you put loads of adjectives . My best part is when she squealed.but you could of used more wow words.
Callum A
29/11/2013 03:43:36 am
Why did you send me here, what do you want?” There was silence in the room. He slowly opened his jaw I shivered more there was an axe on the table to my right I was going to reach for it but I think he knew a reached and got it he suddenly jumped on me and I chopped his head off and jumped out of the window and his headless body followed. I ran in the woods he had his head back on and I chopped him up in paces. its over finaly over I went in the car and in the mirror I sow him again oh no…
Callum
3/12/2013 01:07:58 am
I like the suspense but you should proofread because you missed out a set of speech marks and spelt a word wrong.Also your second sentence was way to long.
Ryan Turnbull (6C)
3/12/2013 01:09:38 am
I really liked it where you chop off someone's head and the body follows it.
Niamh (6DC)
3/12/2013 01:13:34 am
I liked the ending because it makes you think what is going to happen next
jodie
29/11/2013 03:44:32 am
100 WC
Harvey
3/12/2013 01:14:52 am
I like ur tadjectives and suspense. It is really good! U have used your speech marks very well. Maybe next time u could use some brackets or dashes. I like how u have used your little sisters name in it. See u all soon. BYE!!!!!!!
Jack F
29/11/2013 03:44:41 am
This is so scary it is just like a nightmare. When the man came in he said good night Jessie and put a knife to his head and said “I am FBI” Jessie tried to run but was stumbling over his own feet. Jessie was running to his house to get a weapon to kill him. When he got there he grabbed a pole ( made of metal) he swiftly ran to his car but the man from the FBI isn’t stopping. When he got to the police station and there was no won there…
Emilia
3/12/2013 01:14:43 am
I really liked the part where he grabbed his secret weapon ( the metal pole) next time make sure you proof read and edit your work, for example the way you spell one.
John R
29/11/2013 03:45:44 am
The night of dooms day “Why do your have do kill me?” He put a gun to my head he said “Die now” and put the gun down he don’t like me he was part of the FBI. So I and he went to a house no one was in it but we saw someone in the window we couldn’t see noting thought the window we saw a man coming out of the house he had a big stick in his hand he looked like he was blinded. The FBI wasn’t happy people want the house so much now people can have it.
Molly
3/12/2013 01:09:10 am
I like your idea of someone from the FBI getting involved. Next time you need to check your work before you publish it as some parts don't make sense. I think next time you should think about using more full stops.
Ryan 6T
29/11/2013 04:00:12 am
The Musomic 100wc.
Alicia,6DC
3/12/2013 01:09:25 am
Ryan, I really liked the beginning where you said " Suddenly the house was torn apart.
Aidan
29/11/2013 04:11:17 am
“We need to go now”. The figure moved behind the curtains. The door screaked open but nobody was there I was so freaked out. We went in the house then there was a noise so we jumped and I felt like running away however I didn’t because I would not leave my friend. A black object sprinted past me I got freaked out because it was right at front of me. I went upstairs then I seen it again then I carried on walking. OUCH “I shouted. “Something kicked me”. I got too scared so I ran away and I never came back.
Beth ( Brandon)
3/12/2013 01:10:35 am
I really liked your 100wc, it was great how you wrote that you saw a black object sprinting past you. Next time you could use some commas or explanation marks, but overall great!
Jamie 6DC
3/12/2013 01:16:43 am
I liked some of the adjectives that you have used . Next time you could use some different openers however this is a great story.
Leah t
30/11/2013 11:46:43 pm
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