What an entertaining story with good vocabulary. Stomping- wrecking -ruining- bashing. They all give the piece punch and scale. I also like the querky ending.
Good highlighting of the prompt words too.
Keep up the good writing.
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Mr Temple
7/10/2013 03:22:00 pm
Well done Leah, an entertaining yet increasingly accurate story. Your imagination is balanced by a care for choosing the right words.
In the middle, you wrote 'I seen'. What would be better?
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