100WC: My fantasy hero

6/2/2013

23 Comments

_100 Word Challenge: Write a Biography about your Fantasy Hero

You should include:

Name
Appearance
His/her history before your story began
Habits
Special features / abilities

REMEMBER: You only have 100 words to make an impact! Use WOW words, connectives, openers and a range of punctuation.

23 Comments

Katie

8/2/2013 07:36:06 am

Tima
Princess of Tron, Queen Matilida's only child, has fought and trained in The Royal Hero Training For Princesses! (RHTP) fought a team of centaurs at the age of 8!
Has red hair like flames, Skinny wears a red dress and black belt has black and red shoes.
Likes: Cali (her best friend) Gubb (her pet poggle)
Dislikes: Gobble and Grabble (annoying twin goblins)
She has a habit of falling into danger and biting her nails before a big battle against her enemies.
She has a birth mark in the shape of a crown (but she doesn't like it though)

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:47:40 pm

An excellent character fact-file. You have shared a lot of information in 100 words.

nIALL

8/2/2013 07:38:13 am

Dagar is as strong as a Hurricane and his hammer is like metal and concrete mixed together he used to be a normal man who wasn’t very strong until he went up to the highest mountains to train to be a stealth ninja and he was awarded a hammer when he was the best trainer the one they call “master” has ever seen. He got a cloak with his name on the back in gold his dog is called Brover who has 2 heads 8 legs and 3 tails he is also modest and doesn’t brag when he kills a bad guy

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:48:54 pm

Some excellent similes and imaginative information.

However, you must edit your work. You need more than 1 full stop: Remember, you should be the first person who reads your work!

justin

8/2/2013 07:38:45 am

hollie

8/2/2013 07:50:57 am

There once lived a girl not an ordinary girl a hell girl and in her family had the powers she has claws, tail and her she loves killing killer and she loves cats she hates water and she defiantly hates cat food and she defiantly does not like calling her a beast. She has a blue tail, a black mask brown pans and brown t-shirt, belt and two sowed.

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:50:11 pm

Although a little short, you have described Hell Girl well. Great commas in a list. Definitely is the spelling you need.

justin

8/2/2013 07:51:21 am

Tigeruw is strong like a beast his clawes are sharp like knife it can break thrower a rock. He can clam the highest mountains he can stop a
Train at 1000000000000000000000 mph (Wow!)
He was so brave he got a sword and he got some money a £ 10000000000000000 he can 100mph and it is so fast and speedy and he can go so fast that a jet can not win a race . He can move stanchly like Aaron.

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:51:05 pm

This is improved now you have edited it and written like we try to in class. I liked the sharp like a knife simile.

Ethan

8/2/2013 08:01:15 am

Macco is a strong caring
Person. He has a sidekick
Called Pacco is a great guy that can help with anything
You want. I have a sword
That has fire and it kills anything In its path.
My shield is the best ever
In the fantasy world and in the real world too. I have to go and get this gem with the lickwid in to save people
From the swin flu. I will
Put all the klickwid in all the glasses in the village
Then people will be cured from the swin flu and the y will give me a medal.

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:51:59 pm

Good detail about Macco. You have used full stops well. Check your spelling before you submit (you could try typing in Word and using the spell checker!)

kieran d

9/2/2013 02:43:15 am

Reptor,
was a child until he went to a lab and acidentaly merged himself with a lizard then was pulled into a book which seemed real.
he has spike fists scaly skin a hat pants webbed feet a sword and a spider tattoo and a cape. he likes fighting and reading he liks practicing his music.he dislikes when people make fun of him and sleeping he is always awake.his habits are opening doors helping people and fighting. he has ice breath spider senses and amazeing hockey skills. To add to that he has never lost one hockey match as a child or a reptilian

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:52:58 pm

An imaginative entry. Great full stops, but a shame that you didn't put capitals for the start of the sentences.

Caitlin

9/2/2013 10:28:34 am

.Retronixia is up for anything and likes challenges. She is also very acrobatic! she has got many friends but gets put down by the boys .She has blue wings blonde hair and wings on her feet. Witch allow her to fly 2 meters above the ground. Retronixia is very thoughtful and has a torch of Tiber which protects her from everyone and everything that may be a danger or cause harm to her. Retronixia has a nick name which is Reti she loves this name. She has a sidekick witch is quite geeky but always comes up with a plan.

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:54:06 pm

A good profile. Your detail about the torch of Tiber is straight out of a fantasy story - well done!

Bethany W

10/2/2013 10:36:38 am

Saluna is a girl and is in a group of heros.She likes many, many challenges and she has only been on 1 challenge so far as there are thousends of heros in her group.She has a red belt so when you turn it on you dont get hurt by anything in your way. Also, Saluna has gold (real gold) arm bands from Sitka.Saluna has a blue head crown and a black and pink face disguise so no one will know who you are.Saluna has a pet rabbit called Shadow.Salunas habit is to instantly listen to something which sounds uncommon and diffrent to her.Her other habit is to also look at something that is uncommon and unusiall that she hasnt seen before.Shadows habit is to allways eat grass no matter what is happening at that moment.

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:55:23 pm

Excellent detail about Saluna. Sometimes it would be interesting if you used a word instead of Saluna. What about: the golden heroine, this fantastic athlete.....?

Ben

10/2/2013 11:33:32 am

Stealth Hawk

Stealth Hawk started life as a normal ordinary person with a thing for climbing tall trees and up the sides of buildings. He was called Peter and had one naughty mischievous brother called Rolland and a beautiful sister called Lilith. He started training when a man in a dark hood came to his house and made him train at the top of mount doomious. After 25 years of hard training he was presented with a costume a bow and arrows and a set of claws strong enough to cut through a mountain with ease. He succeeded his first mission having to slay a troll.

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:56:28 pm

An excellent profile. I can imagine Stealth Hawk swooping into school to ensure justice!

chantelle

10/2/2013 12:13:26 pm

Carron is a thought ful person who volenteers for any thing and she can run fast, do flips and can protect anybody and anything. Carron has purple pants, top with a pink belt and sword in her hand and a crown on her head.She likes to run,flips and cartwheels.Carron dislikes the fact of the citizens in her village argueing and fighting.She lives in a village called BraveLand and nobody gives up.Flowers is Carrons special feature.

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:57:34 pm

Well done by adding lots of detail about Carron. I wonder how she uses the flowers as a special feature.....

Mr Temple

13/2/2013 01:59:42 pm

Millie, you have used lots of detail, including statistics about her archery skills.

Full stops are missing though...

Millie

10/2/2013 12:37:27 pm

Copilta is a strong charator and ready for anything. she recieved her weapon from her master in a battle with minotors. she has blond hair, eye brow piercing and her wepon is a bow and arrow. as a child she has always wanted to help someone and as she grew older she became more and more determind. she is the daughter of the chief and her mother is called canilta. she is able to shoot and arrow 391 yards. she can use her belt as a rope. her new pet is called kejaf a baby bird and helps her alot.

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