Today was the drastic day were there was no tommorow in neverland.Unfortuantley we had to leave due to the most tragic accident on the universe waking up sleepy! there was no way to get across the borders only by fearful air ballooons. We nervously climbed into the balloon feeling depressed. However, once i got in my heart stopped as i looked down i was suprised to see joyful little green smurfs on the other side of the border, singing happily to their little marvellous smurf tunes then they spotted us, they scattered away feeling scared but that was the last of us! But what happens next?....,
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Caitlin
13/10/2013 04:40:59 am
Great work.
Mr Temple
13/10/2013 03:12:13 pm
A very imaginative challenge, Rose. I liked how you have used adverbs. I tend to agree with Caitlin about the commas. Remember not to use them instead of full stops.
Rose
16/10/2013 04:16:35 am
Unfortuantley we had to leave due to the most tragic accident on the universe waking up sleepy, there was no way to get across the borders only by fearful air ballooons.
aidan
14/10/2013 12:34:13 pm
great work. thus there is a lot of explamation markes Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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