One day when I was walking by the local post office, I seen a stamp. On it it had a brown head with legs popping out of the top of it. The legs were white with blue and red paint sliding down it like slugs on a slide. I closed my eyes thinking of what it could be. I saw a bright light, opened my eyes and to my amazement I was there standing next to the head with le gs. I looked at the wrinkled stamp and saw me standing there near the post office, exactly where I was when I got 'transported'. I closed my eyes and saw another bright light. As I opened them I look around and I was back, next to the post office. As I looked in the stamp again I saw me standing next to the head with legs.
Well done Leah for joining the 100WC. I liked the slug simile and the idea that you could be sucked 'into' a stamp!
It would be even better if you chose some openers, instead of starting lots of sentences with I. What about Without warning, or
Amazed, I.......
Great work!
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lucy
28/9/2013 10:01:09 am
Hi Leah i am reading your 100 word challange and i have realy enjoyed reading it. i think you should chand the word seen to saw in you first sentance. Also in the third sentence i think you should add some commers and take out some of the and's. apart from that i think it is a lovely peace of writing.
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Leah P
16/10/2013 04:25:03 am
100WC: Head and Legs by Leah P.
27/09/20134 Comments
One day when I was walking by the local post office, I saw stamp. The legs were white with blue and red, like slugs sliding down a slide
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Mr Patterson
29/9/2013 02:43:28 am
What a great idea Leah. I wonder if all of the stamps I use to post bits and bobs around the world also have such an interesting story attached to them. Maybe they are all like the paintings in Hogwarts and have people inside!
Im going to take a lot more care when I next lick a stamp!
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Mrs W - Team 100wc
29/9/2013 02:28:32 pm
Hello Leah,
Well done on entering the 100wc. This is like some surreal dream - being transported into the stamp so that you are then on the stamp even after you have returned. A great idea.
I agree with Mr Temple that you need to add more variety to your sentence openings to make it more interesting.
Keep up the great work and entering the 100wc
Mrs W - Team 100wc
Flamborough, East Yorkshire, England
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