Emma, you have used some good descriptive language including adverbs like noisily and gracefully. Good when and if sentences too.
You need to edit - some of your words have capitals in the wrong places and you could also include a !
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aidan
14/10/2013 12:43:34 pm
fantastic openers and wow words thus you should put some questions.
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