A long time ago there lived a girl called Pandora she lived in Greece. One day there was a storm it went on for 2 hours. When it stopped, a super flying thing came shooting down it was an angel, he gave me the box that was worth millions.
Do not open this box. Because it was worth millions, I had to, although the angel said not to she did all of the feelings came out open, faith, happy, sad, fearless they were ghost haunting Pandora saying you will die.
I really liked your blog the end was kind of confusion at the end.
Did she open the box
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Niamh (6DC)
13/3/2014 02:07:50 am
Hi, it's Niamh from Brandon.
I really liked your 100 word challenge.
Next time you could include another character.
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Lewis (6dc)
13/3/2014 02:12:51 am
Hi it's Lewis from Brandon. I really liked all the your addictive. But next time try an add some conservative.
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Cameron Burnham
13/3/2014 02:17:26 am
Hi I'm Cameron from brandon I really like your story.
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Jamie (6dc)
13/3/2014 02:17:35 am
Hi, it's Jamie from Brandon. I really liked some of the words that you have selected for your story. I really enjoyed it.
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Oliver 6DC
13/3/2014 02:19:07 am
Hi,it's Oliver from Brandon primary. I really liked the adjectives you used. Next time you could use more connectives.
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Callum
13/3/2014 02:20:20 am
Hi, it's Callum from Brandon. I really liked the suspense near the end but next time can you include more connectives and adjectives.
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