It was 4.30am Chelsea heard a sound from the forest. There was a black shadow next to a wooden box with glass and blood on it. Then the black shadow disappeared into the darkness. She went up to the box and went to open the box and then there was a loud scream from behind her. She went white and got goosebumps and ran! She ran home and locked the door behind her and ran up to her bedroom window and stared into the woods and watched the black shadow hover around the wood. Later, when the bell rang 5.00am the shadow disappeared.
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Ellie 6dc
13/3/2014 02:04:32 am
Hiya it's Ellie from Brandon I really liked we're you said she went white and got goosebumps and ran.I really enjoyed reading it. It was fantastic.
Cameron Burnham
13/3/2014 02:07:32 am
Hi I am Cameron from Brandon I really like the black shadow part .next time you could use different connectives not just and.
Oliver 6dc
13/3/2014 02:12:20 am
Hi,it's Oliver from Brandon primary. I really liked how you used adjectives. Next time you could use connectives like because,however and furthermore.
Lewis (6dc)
13/3/2014 02:20:48 am
Hi its Lewis from Brandon I really liked all of the scare liked all of it Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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