Well done for having another go at this, Adam, after you lost your work.
Good descriptive words, although you used dark twice - can you think of an alternative? Also, what you should have said instead of 'I seen'?
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Adam
7/10/2013 02:09:32 pm
I saw a funny looking turtle.
Then I saw a bright light.
Old derelict house.
The next thing I knew.
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Mark Temple
7/10/2013 02:15:42 pm
Correct!
Success card please.....
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Cailen(Year 6)
9/10/2013 12:47:46 pm
Since you lost your work and you got some words wrong I can't blame you. I thought it was really good apart from using was 2 times. Anyway I thought it was a brilliant piece of writing.
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Adam
10/10/2013 08:23:10 am
Thanks a lot cailen
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Samantha Smith from brandon primary school
14/2/2014 10:39:59 am
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