It was yesterday morning when my best friend died. Her body lay next to a wooden box and she was plae white. Now I'll tell you how she died. This morning me and Alice were playing in her attic jumping around and laughing on (as girls do) while her mum baked our dinner. She told me she inherited a wooden box from her great grandma. As Alice picked up the box and turned the wheel, it played a weird sound but as she opened the lid her face turned pale and she fell rock hard on her
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kirk
11/3/2014 01:32:35 pm
Hi my name is Kirk I really liked your blog.it was kinda sad was it true
Abbie
12/3/2014 01:29:39 am
Hi Kirk the story I wrote for my 100 word challenge isn't true but it may seem true because sad stories flow through me I dont know why but I believe its easier to write sad stories and thank you for your comment.
Reece
13/3/2014 02:03:01 am
Hi,this Reece from Brandon primary school.i really liked yours there was so many good words such as: weird .when you could of said dull ,mysterious and devilish .next time please use full stops and capital letters
Ryan (6DC)
13/3/2014 02:05:30 am
Hi,it's Ryan Turnbull from Brandon. I really liked your 100 word challenge. It is perfect!
Molly P
13/3/2014 02:13:19 am
Hi it's Molly from Brandon. I really liked everything in your 100wc. Remember to proof read. This is a great 100wc!
Alicia
13/3/2014 02:25:37 am
Hi, it's Alicia from Brandon. I liked how you put as girls do in brackets. Next time you should read it through for missing letters. What happened at the end? You didn't finish the last sentence.
Abbie
17/3/2014 07:11:58 am
Thank you for all your comments they were really sweet I have taken the comments into consideration and now I will retype my 100w challenge with no mistakes. Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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AuthorWe are Year 6 at Tanfield Lea Community Primary School, a primary school in County Durham who want to broaden our horizons and to show the world what we have to offer. We are using this blog to explore web design, write creatively and as a wider audience for the class' talents! 
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