100 word challenge by Adam

11/3/2014

Yesterday, I was strolling through the park like always
and I
came across a strange woman walking around a tree again and again holding
a
small brown box. I just sat there and watched her. She never stopped. Then she

went and sat down beside the tree. “Do you want to come over and open it”
said
the strange woman. “No thanks” I replied. But when she opened the lid
I couldn’t
believe my eyes. There was nothing there. She said to me “This
is the gift of
love!

5 Comments

Aidan link

11/3/2014 04:32:30 pm

Dear Adam,
I like your post.
I wonder what is the women has something wrong with her?
What was the bottle like?

aidan

Hallie link

11/3/2014 06:46:42 pm

Dear Adam,
I love your post! I love the part about the gift of love.
The only thing is that you could explain it a little better. Why was she walking around a tree?
Yours,
Hallie

Amber(6DC)

13/3/2014 02:04:02 am

Hi, it's Amber from Brandon.
I really liked the part where there was loads of vocabulary
Next time I don't think you need to include anything else.

Alex s

13/3/2014 02:09:04 am

I haven't heard a story like that in a while it is very interesting how the box Is a gift of love.
You could of had more information about the strange women
But I like the way you have set out the story

Emilia (6DC)

13/3/2014 02:20:54 am

Hi it's Emilia from Brandon, I really liked the way you used complex and simple sentences eg. She never stopped. Next time you could use more connectives other than that well done!

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