Turtle 100wc by Alyssa
6/10/2013 02:29:48 pm
This is amazing! I actually think this is the best one in the class well done! plus there is nothing that i would do to edit it.You left me wondering about these questions.
8/10/2013 01:50:34 pm
Thank you for your comment Rose. Great questions about the story.
8/10/2013 01:52:57 pm
I enjoyed your story, Alyssa, as always. You have cut down the number of words effectively without impacting negatively on the plot of your tale. I liked suspicious and description of the turtle waddling.
9/10/2013 01:02:13 pm
Wow what a brilliant piece of writing was amazing! I loved your ... in your writing and the way you said goosebumps I thought it was a brilliant way how to describe that you couldn't leave. If you could have you should have used a ? if you could. But everything else was astonishing.
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