Today it was boring,because we had to do 15 tests. They were easy and some were hard. As i was walking home slowly the sky got darker. i thaght that there was somthing after me so i ran home. As soon as i got home i put a scary movie on the tv it was called thriller nights. After the movie was finished i went to bed and it was hallowen night.when i went to sleep i felt drips running down my forehead. i got a cloth to wipe it of i looked and found true blood!
Thank you for submitting a post this week, Jodie, to the 100 WC. I smiled at your starting sentence as I couldn't imagine a worse day than having to write 15 tests - oh my!
You have covered a lot of topics in your story from being at school, to watching TV, then to falling asleep and waking to blood dripping. A suggestion for your next piece is to focus on one of these ideas so that you can include more details for the reader.
Keep up with your writing, Jodie.
Mrs. Middleton Team 100WC
Wow Jodie. This was VERY scary! I think your character is very brave putting on scary movies after such a frightening day already. Imagine waking up in the night to drops of blood on your forehead! I think the ending is perfectly timed. Just one thing - remember that the letter I is always a capital when written on its own.
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