I remember the old GREEN summer days, it’s nothing like that now - it’s like a white veil which hangs over the lush grass. Children RUNNING yet it is so HEAVY on their feet. I see people in a small crowded people pulling a small damaged CARAVAN in the snow. As I walk to school I see bricks of FROST all over the window pane. After school I decided to build a snowman in the garden and throw snowballs for my dog to catch in his mouth! I don’t stay out for long before freezing! So I come into warmth.
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Catherine
28/1/2013 04:45:41 am
Lovely piece of writing. Your imagery is made powerful through effective use of adjectives. I particularly like the metaphor 'bricks of frost' and similie 'like a white veil'. Next time could you write a peice as effective in second or third person?
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