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Caitlin
5/10/2013 02:47:19 am
Really good work
Blodwen(team 100)
5/10/2013 03:27:06 am
Are you thinking of Christmas already Rose? I like the way you have linked the words and varied the length of your sentences but read your story out loud and put a comma or full stop when you need a breathe.
Mr Temple
7/10/2013 03:08:48 pm
An entertaining Santa story. I really liked how you have used lots of -ing clauses which contrast well with your short, snappy ending. Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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