Really good work.
You need more openers.and when you written. Why was it here the Circus was here. You should have said. Why is the circus here. Ok. When you write the story after to lines read it back though ok. 😜
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Lauren - Team 100 wc
6/10/2013 04:02:45 pm
Hi Ryan, good 100 wc. I liked your use of the question, just remember to read over your work as there are some mistakes. Keep up the good work. :)
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Mr Temple
7/10/2013 11:01:50 am
An inventive idea. I know you're a good gymnast but didn't realise you could do a double flip. You have used a range of punctuation, but maybe there are too many exclamation marks.
I agree with the other comment to read it through carefully- the pesky autocorrect on ipad can change your words so you need to check through.
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