Thank you so much for your lovely comment on Olivia's writing - she will be so pleased to see it! I will give her some time next week to leave you a comment.
I really enjoyed your piece of writing, as it was the first one I read where the turtle was evil, not cute!
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Sky
16/10/2013 04:20:27 am
I like Olivia's writing so much I have read it so manny times, I know this storey of the back of my hand. I love it so much there is nothing I could change.
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Mr Temple
6/10/2013 07:48:44 am
An excellent 100 word challenge this week. You have used the key words, included commas and your full stops are mostly accurate. Well done for using connectives like 'because'.
It would be even better if you included some sentence openers: I'm sure you could put a Suddenly, or After a while, in.
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Kaine
16/10/2013 04:20:54 am
Well done Sky I like your punctuation add more connectives.
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